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Admittedly, it has pacing issues. I hope you enjoy it anyway! Please critique.

Ah, who doesn't love a fart joke? But yeah, the pacing was the main problem. It was a one-shot gag that took 3 minutes to tell -- that's way too long. Eating the beans out of the cans stopped being funny straight away. Maybe Nick (wannabe farter?) could have tried to disguise the impending fart in a variety of ways? Maybe the beans could have been revealed later on after Nick had practically given himself a hernia trying to fart. Maybe the gag reveal could have been that Will had a heavy cold and couldn't smell anything anyway. Dunno. It needed a lot more creative input though.

Thanks for the awesome and thought out comments. This is very helpful as these shorts are just things that made us giggle thinking of it and practice for a much larger project to come.

My favorite part was the subtitle "a rumbly in his tummy." I like this animation style and the backgrounds are great. This is a really fun cartoon to watch!