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Hi guys

As you might have noticed I haven't been on the forums for awhile but that doesn't mean I have stopped working on my animation. Here is the first "episode" of my animation "Mike's Life." I decided that once I have finished the whole thing I will combine them all into one movie but for now they are going to be separated into parts. There was originally an intro I made but I decided to take it out since it isn't done yet.

The whole thing was done in AS just with a little help from other programs. Do not hesitate to tell me what you think of it. I have already begun starting the rest of it so make sure to check the forums to see if I post any progress!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MlXA7zDIGxc

Looks good for a start. I'd suggest buying the full version of AS and get rid of the watermark.

No other replies? I would really appreciate more people putting in some suggestions/criticism.

It is very disappointing that I only got one reply to this thread in over a week. I care a lot about this project and it would mean a lot to me to get some more replies. If you are reading this just reply to this thread, it will make my day

I had a quick look at your animation, but I just couldn't watch it for long, I'm afraid. The voices are not interesting, and there is too much talk and not enough action. The drawing is also poor. What can I say? Normally, I wouldn't say anything if I couldn't give any positive feedback, but you did ask for comments.

My advice, for what it's worth, is to start small. This seems a very long animation which will not hold people's attention (it didn't hold mine) -- parcel it up into small chunks and ask for help on each of these before you progress to the next one. Get someone to help you with the voices -- and try to improve your drawing skills...

I think you could improve it by including more angles (e.g. closeUps of individual characters while they converse, also by allowing the audience to see the passing landscape through the windows of the bus) this way you can give the illusion of more happening in your story. These are only meant to be constructive suggestions. You have good start that needs a littie twiking. I applaud your effort!