Ok... the voices stink... the audio is horrible and the colors are all off....
however, i atill wanted to share...
ill
I know... I know... it's bad but it is still a work in progress...
http://www.uglyband.com/billy/edintro.WMV
Here is a new one minus the audio with some tweaks to the animation and additional footage...
Let me know what you guys think so far!
http://www.uglyband.com/billy/EdNew.WMV
UPDATED: Eddie Jones animation test....
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Last edited by illbill on Sat Aug 13, 2005 3:39 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Thanks for the kind words and the offer to help... I just may take you up on that! I posted a new link to some tweaks and additional footage without the audio... Let me know what you think.
http://www.uglyband.com/billy/EdNew.WMV
http://www.uglyband.com/billy/EdNew.WMV
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Characters look great. I think you could work on the first shot though...isn't the same quality as your characters. You also hold too long on that first shot, and a couple other shots feel like you hang on them too long. I'm guessing when you said its a WIP that you realize that some of the dialogue is missing in the sound? Looks good so far, keep it up.
ok.
the first scene (the police vehicle) is abit "off-style".
u could improve this scene.
i think the the characters, the dialogues and the timing, camera movement and scene-sets r absolutely great and fitting the style.
one should never forget that the high-res-audio-work is done at another point of time and state of production, so the audio is alright for a prewiew as well.
now i saw those cars. but i didnt get it right... r they flying?
i found the movement; the light-effects and the chars pretty good.
if they r flying its alright if they dont fly my eyes arent alright
so keep up ur style all the time
the first scene (the police vehicle) is abit "off-style".
u could improve this scene.
i think the the characters, the dialogues and the timing, camera movement and scene-sets r absolutely great and fitting the style.
one should never forget that the high-res-audio-work is done at another point of time and state of production, so the audio is alright for a prewiew as well.
now i saw those cars. but i didnt get it right... r they flying?
i found the movement; the light-effects and the chars pretty good.
if they r flying its alright if they dont fly my eyes arent alright
so keep up ur style all the time
That is really not bad! I agree with Mr. Blaaa's assessment of the establishing shot (exterior of building). It needs to be shorter, and maybe change perspective or something? I was also wondering "what are those tires?" It made sense later with the flying cars, but not at first. Maybe have the police paddy wagon come in for a landing? Just an idea.
As far as the animation goes, it's much better than you may think.
The police commissioner dog is looking better - maybe tilt the head a bit as he's talking? It goes just up and down now. Also, move some more of his body, even just a little bit.
The main character looks good, I especially like how you've done the eyebrows.
The animation of the flying cars is great! The only suggestion there is that the cars that are further away need to be smaller - in perspective.
Nice job!
As far as the animation goes, it's much better than you may think.
The police commissioner dog is looking better - maybe tilt the head a bit as he's talking? It goes just up and down now. Also, move some more of his body, even just a little bit.
The main character looks good, I especially like how you've done the eyebrows.
The animation of the flying cars is great! The only suggestion there is that the cars that are further away need to be smaller - in perspective.
Nice job!
i agree to those "complaining" 'bout the first scene. in my opinion, you should have a look at some comic books in order to learn a bit more about perspectives. i could imagine some long dark shadows and a "creepier" view, like from the ground or so, to create more atmosphere, which would fit very well to the strong characters (which they are!). i really dig the length of the scenes, they seem like still pictures and so remind me of comic stories. that's a good style you develope! my main tip for you is: improve the backgrounds, as the scenes are long and "quiet" enough for the viewer to concentrate on the optics, so a bit more playing with perspective and maybe more detailed backgrounds would be fine. maybe have a look at the latest animated batman-series.
anyway, i'm really looking forward to seeing the whole animation! keep up the good work!
anyway, i'm really looking forward to seeing the whole animation! keep up the good work!
Thanks to everyone!
I agree with everyone here... It's been my first real project with Moho other than an animation I did for my brothers band where they were "South Park" like characters. (You can view that here if you want: http://www.uglyband.com/ep_songs/UGLY_Fear.WMV ).
I agree that the scenes seem long in areas but some of the dialogue i have for it is longer and I think that is what is truly missing.... I have been reworking this opening here and even the new stuff is different than what I've posted... I'll put that up when I get it a little smoother. I like the idea of the police cruiser coming in for a landing and may have to give that a try. 1) I think it will liven up the scene a bit and 2) I think it might help set a bit of the tone of the Sci-Fi epic... So thanks for all the advice and the encouragement. I'll keep working on it and as I feel things are a little more ready I will post for feedback! You guys have been great!!!
I agree that the scenes seem long in areas but some of the dialogue i have for it is longer and I think that is what is truly missing.... I have been reworking this opening here and even the new stuff is different than what I've posted... I'll put that up when I get it a little smoother. I like the idea of the police cruiser coming in for a landing and may have to give that a try. 1) I think it will liven up the scene a bit and 2) I think it might help set a bit of the tone of the Sci-Fi epic... So thanks for all the advice and the encouragement. I'll keep working on it and as I feel things are a little more ready I will post for feedback! You guys have been great!!!
