Hey there! So I've been working on an actual cartoon episode, and here's most of what I got so far! Let me know what you think, thanks!
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QHRTRRdUBaU
My episode preview
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This has a very cute charm to it that is appealing. The pace could definitely use some tightening, there's several overlong pauses throughout. The main character's arms show signs of the seams in the different parts and when he begins to imagine being with the girl there's an odd transition where it dissolves, then suddenly goes to black.
All of those are technical things. The story itself is simple and easy to relate to. The jokes work and the set-up for what's to come is effective and done QUICKLY. It's definitely a solid start and I look forward to seeing more.
And really... why is a horse driving a car?
All of those are technical things. The story itself is simple and easy to relate to. The jokes work and the set-up for what's to come is effective and done QUICKLY. It's definitely a solid start and I look forward to seeing more.
And really... why is a horse driving a car?
~Danimal
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Thanks for the feedback! I did also notice that the pacing was pretty slow, so I am tightening it more. I'll fix the seams as well. I agree that the transition was pretty odd as well, so I'll fix that too. Thanks again for the feedback!
Oh, and as for the horse, it's what I call the art of surprise
Oh, and as for the horse, it's what I call the art of surprise

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Loved it. You are good at drawing.
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Thank you! Glad you liked it!
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Definitely off to a good start.