Yopyop - Deletion of Confusion

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Jeronimus
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Yopyop - Deletion of Confusion

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Yopyop is an animated series that mocks my Dutch teacher, Mr. Paul Janssens, and my English teacher, Mr. Gustaaf Dirks, created by my and a friend of mine. We both write the stories and do the voices, and I mainly draw and animate.
My Dutch teacher's favourite phrase is: "Yopyop", and thus that seemed to us as the perfect title.

In "Deletion of Confusion", Karim gets the chance to ask Mr. Janssens a question, and it is well known to all that his questions are generally stupid.

Deletion of Confusion is the first short we two created. It was made somewhere in January, I believe, and back then we were so glad about it. Right now, I think it's actually quite awful.

Well, give us your criticism; please do.

Watch it on YouTube.
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Needs to be half the length; I think I'd rather see badly-drawn hands than no hands! -- too much aimless arm waving...
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jahnocli wrote:Needs to be half the length; I think I'd rather see badly-drawn hands than no hands! -- too much aimless arm waving...
Agreed. Way too much pointless arm waving. No offense I hope :)
Try some lip syncing too. It's not hard once you get the hang of it.
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Post by riotcrue »

hey its good to see that kids are still making fun of there dumbass teachers, ya true the animation could be better but it has some good dialog in it, and a good story is more important then the animation ,at least in my opinion. just look at the last 3 star wars movies that came out they had amazing animation but you could find better dialog in a 2 dollar sci fi novel. its a pretty good cartoon for a first attempt, that skit you guys have on there is awesome too ,i cracked up when he falls on the piano. keep up the good work
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