Part one of my 30-45 minute movie is up on the web and Part 2 is on the way! The animation and the backgrounds were completely done in Moho. Special thanks to my team of story people, voice actors, and most of all: animators.
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http://webzoom.freewebs.com/jtn1989/P1-2.mov
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As I said before Part 2 is on the way! I'm just waiting for some animation to be completed and then it'll be done!
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The story is good and it leaves me wanting to see what happens next.
I would have thought Barney is trademarked.
You have a lot of reaction shots with the Doctor listening to Barney talking. But the Doctor doesn't react much. Yes you have his eyebrows move a bit and his head tilt some, but a lot of the time it looked like a freeze frame.
at the end of the scene, Barney is suddenly in the Stand Here spot, and then he dissapears. It is not too clear that the machine was operated and he went somewhere in time. Actually I missed all of that the first viewing, it happened so fast.
Who was holding the gun on the Doctor? It could not have been Barney since he was on the left (apparently), but the gun was comming from someone in the direction of the camera. Was it a hencheman? Maybe we should see him. I was confused, because Barney said "I'll blow your brains out." rather than, "I'll have your brains blown out." or "My evil henchman will blow your brains out."
The scenes after the credits were confusing. It moved fast and things were not connected together very well. It was kind of choppy.
It was not clear that we went into the TV to see a commercial. Why was the commercial there? what did it add to the story?
Please don't read me as being harsh. As I said, I want to see more.
I would have thought Barney is trademarked.
You have a lot of reaction shots with the Doctor listening to Barney talking. But the Doctor doesn't react much. Yes you have his eyebrows move a bit and his head tilt some, but a lot of the time it looked like a freeze frame.
at the end of the scene, Barney is suddenly in the Stand Here spot, and then he dissapears. It is not too clear that the machine was operated and he went somewhere in time. Actually I missed all of that the first viewing, it happened so fast.
Who was holding the gun on the Doctor? It could not have been Barney since he was on the left (apparently), but the gun was comming from someone in the direction of the camera. Was it a hencheman? Maybe we should see him. I was confused, because Barney said "I'll blow your brains out." rather than, "I'll have your brains blown out." or "My evil henchman will blow your brains out."
The scenes after the credits were confusing. It moved fast and things were not connected together very well. It was kind of choppy.
It was not clear that we went into the TV to see a commercial. Why was the commercial there? what did it add to the story?
Please don't read me as being harsh. As I said, I want to see more.
personally the end part didn't need to be there, it distracts the viewer from the actual story of the original cartoon. Make it a seperate series. overall i thought it was quite well made, i was little shocked at first with the sound coming in... but i did have my speakers on quite loud (*slaps hand*). Voice acting is quite good, i like the insane, breathing of the copyrighted Barney. Is this ment to be serious or funny?
--Scott
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Thanks for the comments all 
I just wanted to see what other people thought before I thought about cutting it. Oh well, I'll think about it.
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It's Barney's evil twin Evil. That'll be explained in part 2I would have thought Barney is trademarked.
Ya, that was his henchman. You'll get to see him in part 2.ho was holding the gun on the Doctor? It could not have been Barney since he was on the left (apparently), but the gun was comming from someone in the direction of the camera. Was it a hencheman? Maybe we should see him. I was confused, because Barney said "I'll blow your brains out." rather than, "I'll have your brains blown out." or "My evil henchman will blow your brains out."
Ya, I agree, they were a bit choppy, the stuff was ment for laughs but I it didn't turn out as great as I'd hoped. Maybe I'll just cut that scene out...The scenes after the credits were confusing. It moved fast and things were not connected together very well. It was kind of choppy.
It was not clear that we went into the TV to see a commercial. Why was the commercial there? what did it add to the story?
I just wanted to see what other people thought before I thought about cutting it. Oh well, I'll think about it.
Don't worry, I've had harsherPlease don't read me as being harsh. As I said, I want to see more.
It was actually meant to be both serious but also a bit funny.overall i thought it was quite well made, i was little shocked at first with the sound coming in... but i did have my speakers on quite loud (*slaps hand*). Voice acting is quite good, i like the insane, breathing of the copyrighted Barney. Is this ment to be serious or funny?
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.ThanksAgent wrote:I like it!
Did you see part 2 yet? http://webzoom.freewebs.com/jtn1989/Par ... web%29.mov
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