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fatih17
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http://www.dailymotion.com/video/x9td3m ... uveni_tech

Merhaba. Ben bu animasyonu geçen sene ebiko için yapmıştım.İlköğretimde altın madalya kazandım.

İnşallah beğenirsiniz.
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Arent you like it?? :D
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I have some comments. But they are not complimentary. Want to hear them?
You can't have everything. Where would you put it?
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Yes :D
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fatih17 wrote:Yes :D
That's what those in the trade call a "delayed reaction". Here are my comments then:

1. When the camera moves, the tree outlines "boil". This is really distracting.
2. Why do people in sailing ships have machine guns?
3. The story is very confusing. Some slaves later become boxers, a law school, then a president? The ship stops in South America -- what's the link to President Obama from there?
4. You have chosen to tell an epic tale (slavery, exile, civil rights), but you can't even get people to walk properly. You are running before you can walk -- literally.
5. If someone wields an axe against a tree, something should appear to happen. There also should be some anticipation and follow-through. This is true of many other actions too, like digging or boxing.
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Post by fatih17 »

tavsiyelerin için teşekkürler

Thank you for your advice.But I cant speak english.Thats why I dont understand much

1.They arent tranport ships.And Story isnt too mixed.You arent understand it because ı write turkish:D
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